Title: The Immortals
Author: Victor J. Banis
Publisher: Amber Allure
Genre: Contemporary m/m
Length: Short Story (22 pdf pages)
Rating: 4.75 out of 5 stars
A Guest Review by Feliz
Summary Review: This funny, enjoyable story cast a cheeky look at the old saying that “beauty is in the eye of the beholder”.
The Blurb: The philosopher and the lover understand that beauty is only a silvery mist blown by the winds of chance across one’s vision. When the eye of the beholder changes, so change the visions that it sees in the mist. Monkeys become swans, swans become monkeys, and all are as real as the love with which they are seen…
When Jason moves with his partner Peter, a model and actor, to live with Peter’s father in Los Angeles, he thinks the former Hollywood stuntman, Alders, is as ugly as a monkey. But there is much more to Peter’s father than his funny face. Soon, Jason comes to appreciate that brains, as well as passion and masculine energy, can be sexy, too. As their time together passes, Jason finds Peter’s good looks less interesting than they had seemed before, and Alder’s monkey face less repugnant. And soon Jason realizes that it doesn’t matter what the question is…Love is always the answer….
The Review: Strictly speaking, Jason and Peter don’t have overly much in common. Peter is a male model and actor, extroverted, flamboyant and loud in everything he does, and also a little superficial, keen on appearances, and quite well-off. Jason goes to school during the days and flips burgers at night; he’s more the introverted type, a bookworm and art lover, and thinks of himselve as average and a bit of a bore. So Jason can’t help wondering how Peter came to find so much of a fancy in him, and in such a short time, since they’ve been together for only a few weeks when Peter asks him to move in together. But Peter insists that he loves Jason, and Jason thinks he loves him back, because
“…Peter was a catch, there was no denying that. You couldn’t not love a catch, especially if you’re the catcher.”
On that note, Jason allows Peter to make the decisions for both of them without putting up much of a fight. He even agrees to move in with Peter’s father, although he’s quite scared of Alders, who’s as ugly as Peter is pretty and apparently disapproves of his son’s choice in companion. But Peter isn’t only sure of himself but also convinced he knows what’s best for both of them, an so he just sweeps Jason along without asking.
Due to some problems with his school, Jason finds himself with nothing to do and more or less stuck with Alders for his only company since Peter is off at work the whole day. As the days pass by, Jason discovers that there’s more to Alders than his ugly face and his trim, fit body. Companionship turns into friendship and slowly, gradually becomes more than that.
It takes Peter a long time to realize that there’s something not quite right with his and Jason’s relationship. It seems natural, at first, that they would slowly drift apart, with Peter wrapped up in his work and Jason spending so much time with Alders on literature, art, and culture, things which Peter never cared for in the first place. But once Peter notices there is something wrong, he goes about setting things back to right the way he always did, with making decisions for both of them without asking Jason’s opinion. It had worked fine so far, why shouldn’t it this time? Well, Peter forgot that there was now someone else in the picture too, and this one was a force he’d better taken into consideration before it was too late…
This short story was a fine little piece of enjoyment to me. The writing was great. Smooth, flawless, funny and tongue-in cheek, but with just the right amount of seriousness to keep the story from being superficial. Although there was barely any on-page sex, the story oozed eroticism. And for only under 30 pages, the characterizations were awesome. Jason, Peter and Alders had nothing in common with the unfortunately often prevailing perfect-in every-aspect heroes; neither of those three men was, which made them all the more real and dear to me. Alders, in particular – to me he had some serious Mediterranean macho man charm. While it felt a bit put-on with Peter, the attitude and self-confidence just came naturally to Alders. He didn’t have to steamroller Jason, he just needed to be himself – and he allowed Jason space without abandoning him and still kept Jason close without smothering him. Although we only get to hear Peter’s and Jason’s narrative voices, Alders is actually the best-drawn character. The author uses the narrative for characterization, giving Peter much room and stage time and letting Jason fade a little to the background where he feels most at home. I found this brilliant. The plot broke the familiar pattern of romance in an refreshing, cheeky way which I enjoyed greatly. My only complaint was that this story was too short, though; I’d have loved to see a little more drama after the dropping of the bomb.
I can see clearly why some readers might dislike this story and/or its characters. This story has some elements which generally aren’t looked upon overly favorably in general: an apparently weak and gullible hero, a relationship breaker of sorts, something some might consider cheating, and an ending some might find less than satisfying. I couldn’t help myself, though: I loved it. Capital L.























I got this one as Amber Allure free book at the site *Thank you again 🙂
Even the elements you point out as maybe not seen as favorable, work really well in this short that I find perfectly written and totally recommendable.
Thank you for your review 🙂
Hi Helena,
thanks for your feedback! I’m totally with you on this.
Really nice review Feliz. This sounds so good that I want to go get it right now! I like that it has elements that would be annoying in the hands of a less talented author. Just proves again that it’s all about the writing. Thanks Feliz.
Hi TJ,
from what I know of your taste in books, I’d think you’d love this, too. It’s definitely not “mainstream”!
Hi Feliz,
You were so right. I bought it, read it and really enjoyed it! So different, fun and well written. I loved Alders. The way Victor described him, well what I can I say… Thanks so much for the recommendation.
You’re welcome TJ…Glad I could help 🙂 🙂
Hi Feliz! Thanks for the rec.. Great review.
Is it a spoiler to ask what the title “The Immortals” refers to?
This story is going into my TBR pile! Thanks!
Hi Reggie,
thank you!
From how I understood it, the title refers to several things. I can think right away of one of them, the erastes/ eromenos concept of the ancient Greeks. Also that beauty is ephemeral, but love is immortal, and you can’t build love on looks alone. There are several more aspects. I found the title actually quite fitting 😉
Feliz
I read this story and agree with your review. I loved Alders. Amore unlikely hero you couldn’t find no matter how hard you looked.
This book is typical Victor – he turns his characters on their heads and dares the reader to look beyond the obvious.
Hi wave, yes Alders was quite the type, wasn’t he? But so was Jason, and I couldn’t help pitying Peter a little. You’re right, in the end the relationship dynamics were totally upside-down. It was like watching the master at work!
Hey Feliz,
I admit that I saw this story and for some reason glossed over it, but it sounds like something I’d love. I’ll be sure to get it on my next buying spree 🙂
you should, cole. I’d agree. It’s delicious and just a little wicked and a lot of fun!
Hey, hey, thanks, Feliz, for a great review, and all the rest of you for your comments. To me the fun of it was in seeing the older guy – and one’s who’s no beauty, either – triumph, which as we all know doesn’t happen much in gay fiction (or gay life, for that matter.) And I too loved Alders – just too macho, but he knew what he wanted and exactly how to go about getting it. It was a fun story to write, and I’ve reached the point in life where for me that is really the important thing.
Hi victor,
it showed that you had fun! Thank you for writing it.
Victor I suppose it showed that you loved to write this piece.
I must admit I rather read something with more pages but this story sounds like a pleasure.
Ingrid,
It’s only the last few years that I have gotten into writing short stories, and I confess I loving doing so. I think part of it is my age–sitting down to start a full length novel can be intimidating. And a short story has unique challenges for the writer – how can you get it all across in just a few pages? But I guess mostly it’s the story (which for me means the characters) – I don’t think this would have worked as a novel, without getting boring before the end. It’s like those little appetizers that are so good, but would not work in huge quantities.